In Class: Freewrite

I am pretty much done with essay #2. I still could probably add details, or facts to my paper if I reread it enough times. Tonight, I am going to review what I wrote and make sure that it is personal enough, but provides enough information about my topic. My essay was kind of hard to write because the topic was common sense in a way, and all of the information/research I found seemed to be very repetitive. I hope that I do as well on this essay as essay #1, but this essay did not come as natural to me. It might have helped me to have a teacher conference, because that is what really helped me know what I was missing in essay #1. I hope I sited my sources right throughout my paper, and I hope that my research flows in each paragraph and sentence. I need to double check and make sure my research is not scattered throughout my essay, and I also need to make sure my ideas flow, so I do not confuse anyone who reads my paper. I am glad that I chose my topic because it was reassuring to find out that as I researched, people lose weight their freshman year. Also, not everyone gains 15 pounds their freshman year in college, and it is very rare that students gain the full 15 pounds.